Recorded this today. The guitar riff That runs Through The whole song is 1 year old. But Having guitar solo all over the song and making it into a four Minute monotic emonital breakdown was an idea That came Today. I have lyrics. But i'll Let The music speak for itself.
And all that is holy, holy shall be...
Let the light bless and
let these words proclaim the blessing.
Let the seal be broken and let the light prevail
haha. I think there could be some potential but for some reason the words "Out of rythm out of key" come to my mind.
rythm wise it's not like it's awfully off, (well depends on how you look at it, I've defintaly heard worse) but at times it's a bit.. I dunno how to call it, my violin teacher used to call that on time but missing the place... try to feel the groove or whatever more haha, and play with clicktrack as soon as you get faster and try to hit everything...
as for out of key, I'm not sure if your guitar is out of tune or if the harmonies are just not working. I think it might mainly be the latter... do you have a teacher?
I'm not a black metal person (as you know) but I liked the start of what could become of the other two
Sorry if that was too much unwanted smart-assness.